http://www.52stories.net/issue-115/fish-story/ Every picture tells a story. What's yours? Fri, 04 Jul 2008 02:41:48 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.3 http://www.52stories.net/issue-115/fish-story/#comment-454 DanielleM Tue, 16 Oct 2007 23:49:26 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-115/fish-story/#comment-454 I enjoyed this story very much! I especially liked how you started with Tommy's point of view and segued into Anne's, and I think you did a great job of showing us Anne's personality through her dialogue. I enjoyed this story very much! I especially liked how you started with Tommy’s point of view and segued into Anne’s, and I think you did a great job of showing us Anne’s personality through her dialogue.

]]> http://www.52stories.net/issue-115/fish-story/#comment-445 johnRibar Tue, 16 Oct 2007 10:39:05 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-115/fish-story/#comment-445 Really good. I liked the flow of the story - you kept it moving without much bogging down. I wonder if there is a way to weave the back story in a little more, instead of having it all together in one paragraph - I feel kind of rushed through it. But it didn't hurt the overall story - more of a tweak idea. I was happy to see the ending; as Scott said, good side of humanity! Really good. I liked the flow of the story - you kept it moving without much bogging down. I wonder if there is a way to weave the back story in a little more, instead of having it all together in one paragraph - I feel kind of rushed through it. But it didn’t hurt the overall story - more of a tweak idea. I was happy to see the ending; as Scott said, good side of humanity!

]]> http://www.52stories.net/issue-115/fish-story/#comment-442 Skought Mon, 15 Oct 2007 20:11:26 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-115/fish-story/#comment-442 Lots of humanity. I buy 100% of it. I suggest when changing POV, to make it more obvious, a graphical tilda or a double/triple return works wonders. LOVE the puns interlaced throughout. The dialougue was fantastic. Lots of humanity. I buy 100% of it.
I suggest when changing POV, to make it more obvious, a graphical tilda or a double/triple return works wonders.
LOVE the puns interlaced throughout. The dialougue was fantastic.

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