Comments on: Seek First to Understand, Then to be Understood. http://www.52stories.net/issue-112/seek-first-to-understand-then-to-be-understood/ Every picture tells a story. What's yours? Mon, 03 May 2010 08:03:25 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 By: DanielleM http://www.52stories.net/issue-112/seek-first-to-understand-then-to-be-understood/comment-page-1/#comment-406 DanielleM Fri, 28 Sep 2007 01:41:08 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-112/seek-first-to-understand-then-to-be-understood/#comment-406 I enjoyed this, but the one thing I would say is that it feels too much like the middle of a story, and I really want to know what came before and how it ties into what the characters are about to get into. What was the situation that caused Trent to take a bullet for the mayor, and did it have something to do with this Kisoto guy? Is Kisoto a criminal or a celebrity? (Or both?) What is the Triad? Well done -- more, more! I enjoyed this, but the one thing I would say is that it feels too much like the middle of a story, and I really want to know what came before and how it ties into what the characters are about to get into. What was the situation that caused Trent to take a bullet for the mayor, and did it have something to do with this Kisoto guy? Is Kisoto a criminal or a celebrity? (Or both?) What is the Triad?

Well done — more, more!

]]> By: John Ribar http://www.52stories.net/issue-112/seek-first-to-understand-then-to-be-understood/comment-page-1/#comment-399 John Ribar Tue, 25 Sep 2007 01:22:06 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-112/seek-first-to-understand-then-to-be-understood/#comment-399 SCott- Good story. Couple points to think about. First, chewing out a policeman with the words MUCKY MUCK seems a stretch, unless it is a good humored beating. I'm not sure which it is here. Second, a continuity break. You mentioned the ability to use a third person view, and that you had to "keep up" with the action, but the killer (little girl) acts differently in the third person view (handling the knife) than in the first person view (just a side ornament). These are, however, rather minor to the overall story, which begs, as do many of yours, for completion ;-) Nice job. SCott-
Good story. Couple points to think about.
First, chewing out a policeman with the words MUCKY MUCK seems a stretch, unless it is a good humored beating. I’m not sure which it is here.
Second, a continuity break. You mentioned the ability to use a third person view, and that you had to “keep up” with the action, but the killer (little girl) acts differently in the third person view (handling the knife) than in the first person view (just a side ornament).
These are, however, rather minor to the overall story, which begs, as do many of yours, for completion ;-)
Nice job.

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