http://www.52stories.net/issue-111/the-fireman/ Every picture tells a story. What's yours? Fri, 04 Jul 2008 02:43:48 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.3 http://www.52stories.net/issue-111/the-fireman/#comment-390 DanielleM Tue, 18 Sep 2007 04:55:28 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-111/the-fireman/#comment-390 I find myself wanting to know more about Casey after reading this. Why exactly did she invite John to "look at the stars" -- especially since she later seemed surprised when the one star she was looking for was missing. You also have her say "... the closest red dwarf to your sun..." The "your" instead of "our" implies that perhaps she's otherworldly as well as unattainable? :-) I'd definitely like to see a continuation! I find myself wanting to know more about Casey after reading this. Why exactly did she invite John to “look at the stars” — especially since she later seemed surprised when the one star she was looking for was missing. You also have her say “… the closest red dwarf to your sun…” The “your” instead of “our” implies that perhaps she’s otherworldly as well as unattainable? I’d definitely like to see a continuation!

]]> http://www.52stories.net/issue-111/the-fireman/#comment-385 tom Mon, 17 Sep 2007 21:16:53 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-111/the-fireman/#comment-385 Wow. I was bummed out when John set the building on fire, and shocked when the truck turned out to be a spaceship. Would have the building burned down from the ship anyway? Do John and Casey ever end up kissing? So many questions! Sequel? Wow. I was bummed out when John set the building on fire, and shocked when the truck turned out to be a spaceship. Would have the building burned down from the ship anyway? Do John and Casey ever end up kissing? So many questions! Sequel?

]]> http://www.52stories.net/issue-111/the-fireman/#comment-378 JohnRibar Mon, 17 Sep 2007 15:53:32 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-111/the-fireman/#comment-378 I really like the character development for John in this story. The lazy attempt at work, the crush on Casey, the misinterpretations that follow a young man with a six-pack. The draw into the flame as it ignited, and lack of fear as it grew. Very nice development. The sci-fi came quite suddenly -- would be okay if there was more (hint)... I really like the character development for John in this story. The lazy attempt at work, the crush on Casey, the misinterpretations that follow a young man with a six-pack. The draw into the flame as it ignited, and lack of fear as it grew. Very nice development.
The sci-fi came quite suddenly — would be okay if there was more (hint)…

]]> http://www.52stories.net/issue-111/the-fireman/#comment-376 Skought Mon, 17 Sep 2007 13:16:14 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-111/the-fireman/#comment-376 I must say so much of this work felt real- the slow worker doing community service, the way John ‘interpreted’ Casey’s words, even the fire-lust of a pyromaniac. While I don’t claim to know this stuff via personal experience it was handled with the right amount of detail I was sucked in, and enjoying the story. The ending was interesting, and if you’re going to continue the story I’ll be interested. However if you’re not, I would think as a stand-alone you don’t need the sci-fi twist at the end, and overcoming the danger of the fire would be climax enough. I must say so much of this work felt real- the slow worker doing community service, the way John ‘interpreted’ Casey’s words, even the fire-lust of a pyromaniac. While I don’t claim to know this stuff via personal experience it was handled with the right amount of detail I was sucked in, and enjoying the story. The ending was interesting, and if you’re going to continue the story I’ll be interested. However if you’re not, I would think as a stand-alone you don’t need the sci-fi twist at the end, and overcoming the danger of the fire would be climax enough.

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