Comments on: Knowing Value http://www.52stories.net/issue-109/knowing-value/ Every picture tells a story. What's yours? Mon, 03 May 2010 08:03:25 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 By: Skought http://www.52stories.net/issue-109/knowing-value/comment-page-1/#comment-203 Skought Tue, 04 Sep 2007 15:06:28 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-109/knowing-value/#comment-203 Good work. The line “give us a sensible reason for denying us those pleasures” is perfect. In those few words you’ve precisely detailed what it means to be an adult. There is real heart to your writing. Good work. The line “give us a sensible reason for denying us those pleasures” is perfect. In those few words you’ve precisely detailed what it means to be an adult. There is real heart to your writing.

]]> By: DanielleM http://www.52stories.net/issue-109/knowing-value/comment-page-1/#comment-167 DanielleM Mon, 03 Sep 2007 06:15:10 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-109/knowing-value/#comment-167 I thought the "end you right now" statement was the one thing that seemed a little out of place in this story -- I would expect more of a "smack you" or a "whup you" or something like that from a typical mom. But then again, we don't know the back story for this character, so maybe she is tougher than the average mom... I really enjoyed this story, the descriptions were spot on and I could just picture that little girl acting like the pony riding expert to her little brother. I thought the “end you right now” statement was the one thing that seemed a little out of place in this story — I would expect more of a “smack you” or a “whup you” or something like that from a typical mom. But then again, we don’t know the back story for this character, so maybe she is tougher than the average mom…

I really enjoyed this story, the descriptions were spot on and I could just picture that little girl acting like the pony riding expert to her little brother.

]]> By: Tom http://www.52stories.net/issue-109/knowing-value/comment-page-1/#comment-164 Tom Sun, 02 Sep 2007 23:23:25 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-109/knowing-value/#comment-164 <p>". . .I would take you behind that building over there and end you right now. . ." That surprised me, but in a good way. I was expecting something more tame, but this strong statement from the mom really punctuated her love for the kids. Good choice of words. Sounds like the mom may have had a mafioso boyfriend in the past :) Nice story!</p> “. . .I would take you behind that building over there and end you right now. . .” That surprised me, but in a good way. I was expecting something more tame, but this strong statement from the mom really punctuated her love for the kids. Good choice of words. Sounds like the mom may have had a mafioso boyfriend in the past :) Nice story!

]]> By: drew http://www.52stories.net/issue-109/knowing-value/comment-page-1/#comment-158 drew Sun, 02 Sep 2007 16:17:58 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-109/knowing-value/#comment-158 Great story. Really captured the atmosphere of a carnival. I think I knew a chocolate-faced bully like that when I was a kid... :) As with most of the stories here, it sounds like the beginning -- or a segment -- of a longer story. One that I'd love to read. Great story. Really captured the atmosphere of a carnival. I think I knew a chocolate-faced bully like that when I was a kid… :)

As with most of the stories here, it sounds like the beginning — or a segment — of a longer story. One that I’d love to read.

]]> By: James Warrenfeltz http://www.52stories.net/issue-109/knowing-value/comment-page-1/#comment-156 James Warrenfeltz Sun, 02 Sep 2007 02:31:40 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-109/knowing-value/#comment-156 The thing I like best about this story, and I like a lot of it, is the way the narrator is fully present in the present and in the past, speaking to the reader at an adult level and at the level of a six year old girl. I liked the conflicting desires in the narrator as she watches the richer kids on the ponies, and the way her wants come out as scorn for the other children and the ride, while in reality she would like nothing better than to ride the ponies. Great job! The thing I like best about this story, and I like a lot of it, is the way the narrator is fully present in the present and in the past, speaking to the reader at an adult level and at the level of a six year old girl.

I liked the conflicting desires in the narrator as she watches the richer kids on the ponies, and the way her wants come out as scorn for the other children and the ride, while in reality she would like nothing better than to ride the ponies.

Great job!

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