Comments on: The Bathroom http://www.52stories.net/issue-108/the-bathroom/ Every picture tells a story. What's yours? Fri, 04 Jul 2008 02:37:38 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.3 By: John Ribar http://www.52stories.net/issue-108/the-bathroom/#comment-141 John Ribar Sat, 01 Sep 2007 12:31:50 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-108/the-bathroom/#comment-141 Ok, so where were you when this happened?! This was very well done. I felt as if I was there with the narrator the whole time. Having 9 kids of my own, it was easy to imagine the scenarios you presented. And you kept things moving, without leaving out any details that would be important to Daphne... Since I've heard the rumors about part 2, I can look forward to that. But even without, I have to agree that this is a great start to a story - you've pulled the reader in... now what ;-) Ok, so where were you when this happened?!

This was very well done. I felt as if I was there with the narrator the whole time. Having 9 kids of my own, it was easy to imagine the scenarios you presented. And you kept things moving, without leaving out any details that would be important to Daphne…

Since I’ve heard the rumors about part 2, I can look forward to that. But even without, I have to agree that this is a great start to a story - you’ve pulled the reader in… now what ;-)

]]> By: Skought http://www.52stories.net/issue-108/the-bathroom/#comment-125 Skought Mon, 27 Aug 2007 17:15:56 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-108/the-bathroom/#comment-125 Well done. I saw where this was going at just the right time. Having a four year old I understand "Now" means "NOW!". Well done. I saw where this was going at just the right time. Having a four year old I understand “Now” means “NOW!”.

]]> By: drew http://www.52stories.net/issue-108/the-bathroom/#comment-118 drew Sun, 26 Aug 2007 17:56:18 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-108/the-bathroom/#comment-118 Excellent kickoff to a potentially great fantasy story. Kind of like the Narnia stories, only from an average 21st century dad's perspective. Any story that starts with "When a five year old tells you she has to pee, she isn’t kidding," is a winner in my book. :) Any chance you can work the picture of the two kids for Issue 1.09 into a continuation? Excellent kickoff to a potentially great fantasy story. Kind of like the Narnia stories, only from an average 21st century dad’s perspective. Any story that starts with “When a five year old tells you she has to pee, she isn’t kidding,” is a winner in my book. :)
Any chance you can work the picture of the two kids for Issue 1.09 into a continuation?

]]> By: amy http://www.52stories.net/issue-108/the-bathroom/#comment-115 amy Sun, 26 Aug 2007 00:13:47 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-108/the-bathroom/#comment-115 COOL! Hope you post more of this! COOL! Hope you post more of this!

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