Comments on: Life Quest http://www.52stories.net/issue-108/life-quest/ Every picture tells a story. What's yours? Fri, 04 Jul 2008 02:42:52 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.3 By: John Ribar http://www.52stories.net/issue-108/life-quest/#comment-130 John Ribar Tue, 28 Aug 2007 17:43:29 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-108/life-quest/#comment-130 I really like this story. I agree that it is a cool premise, and would certainly need more to make the story complete. But as a scene in an act, I like it a lot. It is a little hard to follow, with the changes in scenery, etc., but after I started the second read, things fell into place very well. Again, a little before or a little after would make it gel quite well. But for a one-week story/episode, very well done! I really like this story. I agree that it is a cool premise, and would certainly need more to make the story complete. But as a scene in an act, I like it a lot. It is a little hard to follow, with the changes in scenery, etc., but after I started the second read, things fell into place very well. Again, a little before or a little after would make it gel quite well. But for a one-week story/episode, very well done!

]]> By: James Warrenfeltz http://www.52stories.net/issue-108/life-quest/#comment-117 James Warrenfeltz Sun, 26 Aug 2007 16:08:28 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-108/life-quest/#comment-117 The premise of this site does seem to lend itself well to setting up a story- many of the stories these past couple of weeks have read like prologues instead of stories in their own right. The premise of this story is intriguing, and conveyed to the reader well- no one is being the standard "Mr. Exposition" who says things like "Well, Doctor, as you already know, a patient who exhibits blahblahblah needs an organ donated, or they might die." One thing that is open for revision is that Glyph and Del seem rather one dimensional stock characters - cowardly drunkard and brooding tormented dark anti-hero. I would have liked to have found some details about their lives that would round out their characters. The premise of this site does seem to lend itself well to setting up a story- many of the stories these past couple of weeks have read like prologues instead of stories in their own right.

The premise of this story is intriguing, and conveyed to the reader well- no one is being the standard “Mr. Exposition” who says things like “Well, Doctor, as you already know, a patient who exhibits blahblahblah needs an organ donated, or they might die.”

One thing that is open for revision is that Glyph and Del seem rather one dimensional stock characters - cowardly drunkard and brooding tormented dark anti-hero. I would have liked to have found some details about their lives that would round out their characters.

]]> By: amy http://www.52stories.net/issue-108/life-quest/#comment-114 amy Sun, 26 Aug 2007 00:04:10 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-108/life-quest/#comment-114 Cool premise. Can't wait to see where this leads. Cool premise. Can’t wait to see where this leads.

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