Comments on: A Small Miscalculation http://www.52stories.net/issue-105/a-small-miscalculation/ Every picture tells a story. What's yours? Fri, 04 Jul 2008 02:36:02 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.3 By: James Warrenfeltz http://www.52stories.net/issue-105/a-small-miscalculation/#comment-52 James Warrenfeltz Fri, 10 Aug 2007 23:33:58 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-105/a-small-miscalculation/#comment-52 Jimmy and Paul needed a bit more definition - I'm not sure what age they were, what types of people they were, they seemed a little bit like two dimensional puppets rather than living, breathing people. On the other hand, the same amount of characterization worked with the night watchman- it seemed to enhance the humor of his character, and worked well with his role in the story. I really liked your idea for what the house in the picture ended up being, too! Jimmy and Paul needed a bit more definition - I’m not sure what age they were, what types of people they were, they seemed a little bit like two dimensional puppets rather than living, breathing people.

On the other hand, the same amount of characterization worked with the night watchman- it seemed to enhance the humor of his character, and worked well with his role in the story.

I really liked your idea for what the house in the picture ended up being, too!

]]> By: Tom http://www.52stories.net/issue-105/a-small-miscalculation/#comment-49 Tom Mon, 06 Aug 2007 21:14:24 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-105/a-small-miscalculation/#comment-49 Very imaginative! Believable dialog. I was sold at the first line! Very imaginative! Believable dialog. I was sold at the first line!

]]> By: Skought http://www.52stories.net/issue-105/a-small-miscalculation/#comment-43 Skought Mon, 06 Aug 2007 17:25:58 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-105/a-small-miscalculation/#comment-43 Thoroughly whimsical and entertaining. I’m glad someone is putting FUN stuff in here Good job! Thoroughly whimsical and entertaining. I’m glad someone is putting FUN stuff in here Good job!

]]> By: Martha Cox http://www.52stories.net/issue-105/a-small-miscalculation/#comment-41 Martha Cox Mon, 06 Aug 2007 15:44:34 +0000 http://www.52stories.net/issue-105/a-small-miscalculation/#comment-41 This is very fun and unexpected! I thought it was hilarious that the "universe" allowed for the old man to be merely annoyed that a house landed in the middle of the dock and not surprise and amazed tht houses can fly. This is very fun and unexpected! I thought it was hilarious that the “universe” allowed for the old man to be merely annoyed that a house landed in the middle of the dock and not surprise and amazed tht houses can fly.

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